有些语句啰嗦,如果能改题目,建议你别写,你是几年级的?
enviroment,Further等用词不当
希望能给你点启示：
This spring, 1/8 of China has been covered by sand after a series of sand storms hitting the country. In one of the worst days, about 330,000 tons of sand fell in Beijing. Meanwhile, within a crow-fly distance of just 70 kilometers away from the city, the nearest desert is still advancing on the capital. Some say China is now at war, one that fights against expanding desert and rapid desertification. What has caused the severe sand storm in China this year? Does desertification play an important role? How has China being dealing with the issue? Are the methods effective?