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  • The map shows the development of

    (加 the) village named Chorleywood from 1868 to 1994.

    For transport,the two main roads were built in the early time

    located in the north-west of the map.Later,the railway situated in

    the south of the map was built in 1909.After almost sixty years,

    The motorway was built in 1970 which is sited in the east of this picture.

    The motorway and one of the main roads crossed at the

    northeast corner of this map,the railway crossed with the main

    road and the motorway respectively at the south-west corner and the

    south-east corner.

    With the development of transport,the residential areas became much

    more than the beginning in which there were only one residential

    area in the right side of a main road during 1868 to 1883.Many

    people lived around Chorleywood Station just off the cross of main

    road and railway during 1883 to 1922 due to the construction of the

    railway.The population (人口增长developed 应改为 grew) on (去掉 the) both side of the station along the railway during the 1922 to 1970.By using (要加 of the)

    motorway,population (developed 改为 grew) in the two crosses of motorway and

    railway ,main road respectively between 1970 and 1994.And

    Chorlerwood Park and Golf course (was 要改为 were)

    built up in the area which had the most convenient transport.

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