请高手帮忙改改我英语作文中的错误,

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  • If I were a boy

    I wish I were a boy!

    I still remembered that when I was a child,my parents ofter(一般后面加现在时,used to) said to me “How I wish you were a boy.” Because if I were a boy,my father would not have lost his job,my family would be a good family.

    (If I was,将were I删去)Were I a boy,I would(缩写成I’d会更好) try my best(也可用I’ll spare no effort) to learn knowledge as much as possible.Because in order to(删去in order to,I want/hope)to support the family,parents try(不是过去时吗,tried) their best to work hard.(好像不符语意吧,parents worked so hard that they were too exhausted to enjoy their life and)I want to let them live a happy life.

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    If only I were a boy!

    If I were a boy,I would help the girls who need help.

    If I were a boy,I would take good care of my love(lover) and protect she(her).

    If I were a boy,I would take good care of my parents and my little sister/ brother.

    If I were a boy,I would…

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    Today,I would rather I had a job.

    If I had a job now,I would make much(a lot of) money.However,I am studying in the college.To be frank,I would rather I had a job.Because I think if(I) were at work,I also can get much experience and knowledge.I think it will be make me more wonderful.To be the truth,I am very regret to study here.If I had not choose(if I didn’t make a choice)to study here,I think I would be happy now.In addition,If I were rich,I would buy a house for(to,此为固定搭配!) my parents.I want to live a life of ease(want to后面改为live a easy life) and make(let) people around me have a good life.In all,I will try my best exertions(好累赘~删去吧) to study and I can(will比较符合语法规则) find a good job.