不是很通顺哦.外国人不会这样写的.(而且要注意标点符号,使用不同符号可以令句子有不同意思哦)
以下是我的意见:
Hello! everybody. My name is Gary. I was born in Tianjing, however I am studying and living in foreign country now, which is a beautiful country. The people here are so nice and I hope I can get a nice lady to become my girlfriend!
这样就比较简单通顺了.