天哪!你要不就是那软件翻译的要不就是英语浆糊!唉没办法来来来哥给你找错误.
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I think it’s【‘s去掉,使用形式宾语来提分.’】 hot【hot在这里什么意思不懂,表示副词‘紧迫地’?建议去掉.】a good significance that we read fewer and fewer【 fewer and fewer?这句话到底要表达什么?fewer and fewer是越来越少,那么你前面的“good significance”(很有意义)与后面的就逻辑矛盾了,建议改为“more and more”.】 extracurricular books.Sure,I acknowledge that as a middle school students【去掉a,后面是students复数形式不要定冠词a.】 we have too much stress in study .But should it be an excuse for not reading other books?I don’t think so.
On the one hand,extracurricular books can open our eyes【太chinglish了!表达开阔眼界请用”broaden/expand sb's horizons”,而“open our eyes”是看清楚认识到的意思.】 to the colorful world .We will know band【band在这里要表达什么?是不是broad,宽阔的?】 news about science ,society or【建议用and,在这里应该是并列不是选择.】 any other things to have more knowledge.For example ,if we read more English books about English culture ,we can improve our English.【技巧：这里改一下这个句子有highlight哦：For example ,reading more English books about English culture ,we can improve our English.】
On the other hand,though we have much homework to do,we still have some spare time .we can use it to relax ourselves and studying effects【改为effects of study】 will get better .
So reading more extra curricular books is good for ourselves and it’s hot harmful【不是harmful伤害的,而是helpful有帮助的.】 to our study .Do you agree with me?
Let us enjoy the happiness of reading extracurricular books and having more knowledge!
综上所述polish一下：
I think it a good significance that we read more and more extracurricular books.Sure,I acknowledge that as middle school students we have too much stress in study .But should it be an excuse for not reading other books?I don’t think so.
On the one hand,extracurricular books can broaden(或expand) our horizons to the colorful world .We will know broad news on science ,society and any other things,say,to have more knowledge.For example,reading more English books about English culture ,we are able to improve our English.
On the other hand,much assigment as we have to do,we still get some spare time .We can use it to relax ourselves and thus the effects of our study will get better .
So it is good for ourselves that reading more extra curricular books and it’s helpful for our study .Do you agree with me?
Let us enjoy the happiness of reading extracurricular books and have more knowledge!
嗯,差不多行了,你的大体上ok了!