我觉得你的中文表达有问题,有的地方意思不清楚,就计划后面开始不知道写的什么而且跟前面写的不在一个点上.有道翻的根本就不能看,就随便帮你改改吧
Hello, my name is LWJ, I'm very glad to deliver a speech to you.
My English is too poor to pass the English exam last year. But I never lose my confidance and always believe "nothing is impossible". I want to be enrolled by university so I have to study hard.
Since I set my goal, no retreat is allowed. To achive it, I even made a plan.You laughed at me about my low score. While your mock just give me more enenger to fight. I belive I can make it.
That's all, tks!