挺好的，给点微弱建议：because换成in that, due to, given that.
important 换成significant， essential
文章结构也许可以用Initially，also， moreover，what is more, finally 来排列。GRE考者的建议。
http://home.ustc.edu.cn/~xniverse
挺好的，给点微弱建议：because换成in that, due to, given that.
important 换成significant， essential
文章结构也许可以用Initially，also， moreover，what is more, finally 来排列。GRE考者的建议。
http://home.ustc.edu.cn/~xniverse