麻烦帮忙修改一下我的日记有没有什么语法错误以及不地道的表达,

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  • Actually I really don't know why I like that dog so much.I believe that the dog must be the most lovely animal in the world.:)

    These days,I got a new job,actually speaking,it's not a job,just an activity.This job is not compulsory but it's full of fun.Can you guess what it is?Yes,just feeding that little yellow dog under my apartment.

    Evertime I go to dining hall I will take some rice,vegetables,meats,beef,steaks,fishes or chickens from my dinner and put them into a bag or a dinner bucket.Then,I give all this delicious food to that doggy.However,that little young thing seems very afraid of me each time,he want that food but he is not brave enough to come and eat it.Then I say to him (maybe it's what I say to myself)"oh come on boy,I am not gonna hurt you..." surly,it doesn't work,because that doggy can not understand my language.Well,that's OK.

    This afternoon I did the same thing,but it was quite interesting that when I was watching the doggy eating,another dog came around and that was a brave dog.He came and ate that food together with that little yellow dog and allowed me to touch him!So cool .

    改的仅是语法,坦白的说不地道的表达就多了,当然日记也不做多少要求的,看明白就行