先看看语法~
Last week ,I saw a people wasting water in the restroom.
people是复数,person才是单数.
→Last week ,I saw a person wasting water in the restroom.
I was very angry and I warn her not to do this next time.
你前面用了过去式,可是忘了后面的哦~
→I was very angry and I warned her not to do this next time.
Don’t throw litter into river.
river前面没有冠词,或者加复数也行
→Don’t throw litter into rivers.
从文章上来说~
We shoud save water.And we mustn’t pollute water.Don’t throw litter into river.Water is the source of life.
We can do a lot to protect water.Let’s take action!I believe we can do it!
这段你没有觉得怪怪的么……怎么也应该是先说We can do a lot to protect water,才举可以怎样做的例子吧~而且例子的内容也有点单薄了恩~结尾再有深度一点~
那个~逻辑关系最好在紧密一点,因果关系什么的再强烈一点.
比如说多用点连接词,像什么as a result of,for example,from my perspective,as far as i am concerned,之类的恩~
顺便说一下,写作文的话,用一些从句会更能丰富你想表达的意思……
单词什么的最好在多样化一点~不能说要表达污染的意思就光用pollute吧~还有contaminate、taint之类的恩~
加油加油~要把学过的东西用起来才行~