题目用A Horror Story.比较好
第一行 ：loves->loved过去时嘛,a boy->the boy如果你说的这个boy与上文介绍的不一样那就不用改,其实之后的the boyd都可以写成he/him（根据不同情况）了第二行,行首的to去掉,board->abroad出国吧?course->study因为已经出国了,学习的还是国内的课程么?feel->felt
第三行swear-> sweared过去式,
第四行gives->gave
第五行,如果一定用during的话后边用During the boy's staying abroad.haven't->didn't更好,因为这里只说没有告诉他,不强调其他影响.
第六行was died把was去掉或者把died 改为dead. they->he
第七行,that they appointment直接改为for their appoitment好了.只有一个灯么?
第八行he saw the sight of the girl back要表达什么意思?是说看到了背后女孩的影子么?says->said
第九行came->am,miss->missed,hasn't->didn't
第十行开头,answered->answer,2分钟过后这种表达很奇怪,楼主自己体会一下as a matter of the fact把the 去掉
第十一行a ghost that sit on the chair->a ghost that is sitting in the chair.chair从来都是用in的.afraid of it是要表达非常害怕么?那这样就不对了应该是was so scared/frightened
第十二行,这一行表达很奇怪,不过还说得过去.
最后一行：是要说请为我活着么?那就是if you love me too/if you also love me, please live happily for me.