1.Once I failed an exam 应该用failed in
2.Iarrived my home 应改为I came back home
3.When he saw me,he asked me what happened and I told him my mark .
应该是what had happened
4.I made delicious food for you.
改为I have made some delicious food for you.
还有就是文章意思不怎么对,你写的是family,your parents,但是你文章里只写了your fathe