可不可以帮忙改一下托福作文? 语法很不明白. P.S 写的很慢,如何提高,很头疼.

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  • From the perspective(opion) of past generations like our grandparents or even parents,they perceive(think) that comparing with(instead of)spending (the)delete money on entertaining(entertainment),they would rather deposit their money in (the)delete bank.However,

    in contemporary society,the majority of youngsters like me( feel )delete strongly (about)delete

    agree(ing)delete with the statement that people should spend their money more on

    traveling and vocation.(than others)

    For the senior citizens,having the impulse to go cannot be the decisive reason for them to

    take the action.Taking numerous responsibilities,they are enabled to think

    comprehensively when facing the choices.Once,I asked my parents about their views on this question,they said when they

    were in my age,they have(had) the same feeling of intense eagering to explore the world.Nevertheless,as they

    grow(grew) old,they begin(began) to worry about their physical condition(s),their family,

    including both their children and parents.Their experiences present me with a

    convincing fact that pushes me

    to ponder whether I will have the

    courage to begin my journey if I were in their age.

    Therefore,it

    becomes clear to me about which way I should go,spending or saving.From my

    point of view,people who choice(choose) to deposit thier money can be generalized into

    the proposition of pursuing a better life.But when

    under a further discussion,the sufficient

    capital,if not make use of,is merely a number on one's credit card.

    Furthermore,when one has traveled around,it can help he or she establish a solid foundation

    into his or her future career for the rich experiences,thus,he or she may

    well have the capability and competitive edge to earn the money back.For

    example,when I took the English

    writing class,the teacher there is(was) a considerably exceptional person.Through

    his speech,I can(could) tell a man with confidence and well-informed.Later on,when

    he talked about his stories,we all amazed at how valiant he is(was) for he had been to several countries to study and

    work(ed) alone during his university years.His charming personality can be imputed to what he underwent and

    that leaves a deep impression on me.

    In a nutshell,I believe that people should fly to the place where they longing

    for when such ideas come into mind.

    Investing your

    money on travel can in many ways benefit your life and leave with no regrets.

    时态!