Dear Bill(:改为,)
I'm very happy that you will come to Beijing （that 改为this）winter.My family and I (do both we 不明所以,去掉)can （to 去掉）make you feel at （the 去掉）home.
During your stay in Beijing,I will show you around some famous tourist attraction(加s),such as the Great Wall,Beijing Capital Museum（,改为and ）Beihai Park.We will also spend some time tour(加ing) around downtown Beijing,（when 改为where）you can see the rapid change(加s) of the city.Another （excited改为exciting ）moment we will share is going to the 2014 New Year's Concert,which can help you experience Chinese culture by a pleasant way.
I believe(去掉d) we will have a good time.Looking （forfward改为forward ）to your early visit.
Yours,
Li Hua