1.第一句话有些别扭,all the teachers我就觉得更好.
2.they say I am funny.
3第三行but大写或者but前用逗号
4dynamic 形容词,应改为名词energy,the life改为my life更好些
5on the one hand ,on the other hand 用法错误.这用于说明两个对立方面的,用于前面说好的方面,后面说不好的方面.on the one hand want to improve my listening and speaking .on the other hand ,I want to stand o my own two feet 可改为 I mainly want to improve my reading and speaking ability,and meanwhile I would like to go on my own feet.
6.第五行I大写
7倒2行so中s大写
8最后一行here前去to
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the guitar 中the 不要去
I have much MORE dynamic to enjoy the life .这样改也不对.have后要名词.