I have a dream that is get into Columbia University, a great university in the financial center of the world.
改为:I have a dream that i can get into Columbia University,which is a great university in the financial center of the world..
when I had first known that university it was loved by me. 改为:On hearing the university,i fell in love it immediately.
第三句,我没有明白你写的意思呀.
第四句:i will succeed if the bright wisdom can be embedded in my mind.
第五句:In order to achieve my goal,i have been studying very hard for a long time every day.
第六句:i can still remember what Mrs. Clinton said to me ,she said you can make your dream come ture if you put your heart into it,which i will believe forever.
第七句:this is my dream,it is a young dream, but it is very bright for me.of course,the darkness will eliminate one day.
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