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  • How to spend you lucky money

    During the spring festival,i have gained some lucky money from my parents.i plan to deposit half of them to my own savings account and use the other half to buy something for myself,such as books and shoes.If there are still remainings after the shopping,i'd like to give them to the poor to help them.their smiles will be the source of my happiness.

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