1、such as listening to pop music or reading magazines.中的or是否应该改成and或者“、”?
2、and it‘s free,改成“of course it‘s free ”是否会更轻松些?
3、some show me customs and culture in other countries ,and others tell me to face to the difficulties and to be brave.改为
Showing me customs and culture in other countries ,telling me to face to the difficulties and to be brave,and so on,all that things it can give me.会不会更口语化些?
4、i can learn some new words from movies.中的 movies可改为them 以避免重复.
5、 i have known many new words中的 known 改为got或者recognized会更好些.
以上一些,可供参考.