请帮我看下这篇英语作文,哪里能修改哪里能改进.谢谢!

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  • The picture is show 有语法问题,改成:The picture showsHome's dinner改成:family dinnerall the family sitting around the desk 却动词,另外吃饭用的桌子一般用table. 所以改成:all the family members are sitting around the tablealthough the has 改成:although there is a lot of food o the table.直接说:all the tennage are playing the cell phones.There are happy when they watch the screen---they areI am guilt----I feel guiltyI play the ---I also play the telephone at dinnera good dinner is...-----------A good dinner atmosphere shall be all the family members talking to each other and all of them should be happy. 太多要改的了.