eceive改成received
lift改成life
me改成my
studied改成study
I take a self-study examination改成I'm going to take the self-study examination
it will get college diploma改成it will get me a college diploma
The time is passing改成Time and tide wait for no one.
we must accept it前面加but
（基本上还写得不错；有些地方应该是粗心所致,例如life写成lift,并非你本身的水平问题）