“I have chatted with my father”应该改为“I chatted with my father”
日记的话一般用一般过去时就好
“We told about the war”是talked about吧
“There is a person's son ”看起来怪怪的
“I don't know whether is really”应该是“I don't know whether it is really” it做形式主语
“it is said ”也不对,是“it said that”吧
我看不下去了……错的好多啊,你再仔细检查一遍吧.
要注意时态和句子成分!