需要改的地方我用大写,并且我觉得有必要讲解的我会说,如果没有说,就说明只是纯语感问题,或者习惯问题,这样改动会比较像英语母语的人的思路.
“what SHOULD BE REMEMBERED when you decide what type of advertising to use.”
Before you choose A type of advertising,The 1st thing TO KNOW IS what kind of cosumer is your target,It's a good idea to split the consumers into different targetS by their
background ,You can do this by investigating the consumers' personal
information ,such as gender,age,hobby,etc.(用ETC的时候不用And,用 so on采才用.) Also remember that the
email address concerning(这里用的牵强吗,或者用related to 适合吗) the consumer is
pretty important.（我没看懂这句话,意思是你要给顾客附上你的地址吗?ALSO REMEMBER THAT YOUR MAIL ADDRESS SENT ALONG WITH THE AD SERVES A KEY FUNCTION WHEN THEY NEED TO FIND YOU）My third ADVICE(因为用tip给人一种很自负的感觉……) is to respect your cost,how much
MONEY you will （用“will you”的话是不是变成了疑问句?） invest.(还是没懂,意思是要打好预算?IS TO CONTROL YOUR COST AND MAKE A GOOD PLAN ON HOW MUCH MONEY YOU WILL SET ASIDE TO DO THIS ADVERTISEMENT) Before we finish
dont forget to to be familiar with the market which your bussiness
belong to.What might be better is investigate (is是BE动词,后面不能直接加动词呀.) the infomation from
your competitors.(THINGS WILL BE BETTER IF YOU CAN DO AN INVESTIGATION ON YOUR COMPETITOR)
当然我也只是个刚毕业的.……所以有不对的地方请忽略吧.