帮改下CET4作文 给点意见l老写不好

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  • Nowadays,disposable plastic bags,used frequently in supermarkets,has increasingly

    damaged our environment.Plastic bags was originally used for convenience,but after so many years ,nagetive affection was more and more serious.so we must limit the use of plastic bags.

    Limiting the use of dispossable plastic bags has more positive effects than negative ones.First,plastic bags are hard to be recycled,which is the main reason for doing so.Secondly,burning plastic bags is bad to our health and pollutes our air.Finally plastic bags are always thrown away everywhere .All in all ,we must limit the use of plastic bags.

    It is no doubt that limiting the use of disposable plastic bags are of great importance.we can use other container instead in our daily life.limit the use of plastic bags and our environment will bocome more beautiful.

    lz,你的作文怎么说呢···小错误很多···语法上我觉得也有些错误.整体逻辑不怎么好,也就是观点不够清晰鲜明,每个观点的阐述太简单了.此外,建议lz去看看和学习连接词和总结性词的使用,自是最好再增加点···

    整体结构还是很好的,考试时用这样的结构还是不错的···