People are reading as much now in the electronic age as possible.
第一句无语法错误,但是建议重新组织,例如：
“In this age of Informational Technology, people are reading as much as possible.”
But it is a different kind of reading. People have less time for book-reading. Although they still read books, they want the books to move faster.
这个书籍"move"的动词不通,不知道你想表达什么.
So they choose to read the hypertexts instead of linear texts.
什么叫 linear texts? 线性文字?是不是 written text?
A hypertext contains many segments of linear text. Hypertexts also contain links to other hypertexts, enabling readers to easily explore other relevant materials if they choose. Even public libraries need to lend text discs and text readers rather than books.
为什么说公共图书馆“需要”这么做呢?难道不是已经在实施了吗?另外 text discs and text readers 不太清楚,直接写 "electronic books on CDs" (光盘上的电子书)之类的好了.
However, these new developments will lead to problems.
已经被实施的技术,不要用未来式.用现在时.
One of the first problems is that a lot of articles on the Internet are not verified, so there are a few mistakes which will mislead readers.
articles 前面需要加 the.而且不是文章被确认,而是文章里的信息.所以写成 the information in a lot of the articles on the Internet is not verified,
a few 去掉.网上的错误信息何止一点点?which 要改成 that
即：so there are mistakes that will mislead readers.
Thus the hypertexts are not so reliable or responsible to the readers as regular books. In addition, some websites are not permitted by the presses but they post the articles to the Internet, consequently, it will cause the problem of copyright.
后面一句语义模糊.应该改成：
In addition, intellectual property rights (知识产权) are violated as some websites illegally host copyrighted material.
What’s more, do you consider that electronic reading will make us lazy and dependent?
dependent 后面要解释依靠什么(比如 technology).而且在 what's more 后面不要用问句.what's more 是表示你还有信息要提供,这样跟个问句很突兀.
We only look at the screens rather than touching the regular books, and our feelings of turning over the books are becoming lost.
regular 换 physical
翻书实际上是翻页,所以是 turning over the pages
In my opinion, the institution of the rules about the Internet should be perfect so that it can not only be responsible to us readers but also safeguard the copyrights of the presses and the writers.
“institution of the rules about the Internet”是什么东西?
it can not only be ... but also safeguard
换成
it is not only responsible... but also safeguards...
Simultaneously, we shall emphasize the importance of reading regular books in order to protect and support this traditional sort of “literacy”. After all, books are irreplaceable. In conclusion, we shall pay attention to both regular books and electronic books.
最后没什么大错误.