请帮忙看看这篇翻译有什么地方要改进

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  • I dislike that man who powers off at 0:00.

    At night,you miss him suddenly and are eager to tell him you like him.You take heart of grace to get through his phone number,fancy that his telephone message comes over the line:

    "I can't answer the phone now,please leave your name..."

    There is nothing worse than that you can only hear his message when you feel lonely.

    Sometimes,he doesn't power off,but it is re-routed paging centers.At night,you really want to hear his voice.Fancy that a formal voice passes when the phone is connected:

    "Who's calling the owner?"

    Should you paging him?Your half of heart have been cold.You tell the Paginger with disappointed:"Nothing."

    Since he connects the mobile phone to paging centers,why did he buy a mobile.That is a bear!

    In that deep of night,you would like to cry with him.After several scruple,you made his telephone and got his telephone answering machine.You said:"This is me..." Then you hanged up the phone depressedly.

    You encountered him next day,he asked:"Did you call me yesterday?what happened?"

    "Oh,no big deal.Nothing important." You can only reply this way.

    在word里改的,本来改的地方都标示出来了,可效果没出来.