Asbestosis has slightly risen between the years of
1968 and 1996, however, there is a more massive increase in （the）mesotheliomia which is a more advanced type of asbestosis. Atopic dermatitis is a chronic inflammatory disease also known as atopic eczema. It could be caused from
families（family名词作定语,应为单数）history as well as the chemicals in the work place. It usually affects
those that （that应该换成who）are exposed to chemicals in the work place, for example hairdressers and mechanics. However ,atopic dermatitis is 缺少the most common to families with
hypersensitivity of skin to the substances in the environment. Atopic dermatitis
has a variety of biological effects. It could cause the autonomic nervous
system to be irregular, and the immunodeficiency of cells to decrease. The
physiological effects are a variety of skin maladies, such as dry and rough
skin. These skin alterations can （can去掉）prove to be uncomfortable and painful for some people. However there is no cure for the disease（可不可以换成it） but, there are a variety of therapies that can improve a person’s symptoms. There is basic dermatological therapy that uses oils for the treatment of dry skin to help ease the scratching and anti-inflammatory therapy which helps（去掉这两个词换成helping,做结果状语） to control the disease (IPCS,1999).
Industrial disease can be found in different forms.
Asbestosis, pneumoconiosis and atopic dermatitis, are （the）only three examples of
the many occupational diseases 缺少复数that can have long term health effects on a
person’s life. Unfortunately most of these diseases are incurable and cause a
considerable amount of deaths. Now the worldly population are more （比较级）aware of
industrial diseases. A variety of things (换成measures are being taken )are being done to prevent them, for example (such as )using less of the dangerous materials, and reducing jobs that expose
people to dangerous gases and chemicals. These diseases are being monitored and strategies are (being)undertaken to prevent them, but there has to be去掉constant 这里少一个空格vigilance of harmful factors in the workplace must be strenthened这是增加的斗胆改了,用词重复较多,不知怎么样,感谢给与机会