First,we will set off on（改成to） the subway from TianYi Hotel,and go to the western Han Nan King's Tomb Museum so that to know something about the history of the Nan Yue kingdom.（去掉so that,这里没有很明显的因果关系,用to就行.）
After we will（这里will去掉） get out （加of）the subway,we can（改成will,can太中式） see the China Shopping plaza,which is the busiest shopping center in GuangZhou.
After once（改that）,we will also go by subway to Sun Yet-San （变成we will also go tu Sun Yet-San by subway）and has no single pillar insile
we will have lunch togethar on the right side of the hall's the lawn（改成we will have lunch together on the lawn,which is to the right of the hall.）
After lunch we will go to visit chem clam Academy and (去掉and,加上句号)which （改成It）is a museum （加上that）has much Endustrail arts of our Guangdong province.