1.全文时态没有保持一致.第一句DID改为Do,could改为can
2.主宾不对称.还是第一句,既然是do you,后面也应该是your parents
3.重复累赘,第二段第二句have little time to communicate with each other and they can't communicate with each other successfully yet.and 后面改为 and they can't handle that successfully yet
4.中文式翻译.你是想表达“父母不认同孩子的想和做”但这样表达不好Parents dislike their children think and do,而是Parents find it different to agree with children’s way of thinking and doing things
5.人称不对应,第二段的总体语气既然是we,那么那句as you know 改为as we know 正如我们所知
错误还蛮多的,建议楼主先自己把接下来的改改,我下次再来看,有事先走了,没看完.