第二句 "there is a lot of time."
第三段 不应用"in other words",换用"besides"."do not nervous"应为 "don't be nervous".
第四段 第一句"college is a place where you start a brand new life." "for the better result" 改为"for a better result" 较好.
"library is a good place for students to study."
"intelligence"拼写错误.
"join in all kinds of activities"