Now I’d like to take you to a beautiful city – Vienna,the capital of Austria.It’s a city with a population of over 2million on the bank of the Danube River.The environment there is clean and tidy and it’s famous for it’s culture in the world.It’s such a good place that attracts large numbers of travelers here.At the same time it also catches a lot of musician’s eyes.For this,it’s also called the capital music.
If I can get a chance to go,I do take it.
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1 on the bank of the Danube River---along the bank of the…
2.it’s culture---its culture(it’s means it is culture while its means a culture belongs to…)
3.it’s such a good place that attracts large…it’s such a good place that it attracts large…
4.For this---therefore
5.If I can get a chance to go,I do take it.---If I could get a chance to go,I would just seize it.