这位同学,雅思写作里面要注意的事项不少,我列出了一下几点,希望能对你有所帮助：（括号内为正确）
（1）时态
Fossil remains of dinosaurs are found recently.
(Fossil remains of dinosaurs were/have been found recently.)
(2) 词性：
The develop of personal computers effect on people’s lives because small businesses can easy afford them and this makes their work more efficiency.
(The development of personal computers affects people’s lives because small businesses can easily afford them and this makes their work more efficient.)
(3) 名词单复数
Nowadays anyone who study at university need to learn how to use computer.
(Nowadays anyone who studies at university needs to learn how to use computers.)
(4) 词序
Success only can be achieved by hard work.
(Success can only be achieved by hard work.)
(5) 搭配
He appears to be very experienced with dealing with people.
(He appears to be very experienced in dealing with people.)
(6).名词误用
Recent statistics have shown that the distance between the rich and the poor is increasing.
(Recent statistics have shown that the gap between the rich and the poor is increasing.)
(7) 动词误用
This is a delicate matter that has raised considerable controversy.
(This is a delicate matter that has aroused considerable controversy.)
He arised the matter at the meeting.
(He raised the matter at the meeting.)
(8) 平行结构
Instead,the money should be spent on improving school building and to help old people.
(Instead,the money should be spent on improving school buildings and helping old people.)
(9) 句子结构
There are many people would agree with this statement.
(There are many people who/that would agree with this statement.)或（Many people would agree with this statement.）