Question

托福作文求修改~People attend college or university for many differe

Answer 1

有些拼写错误,你需改正先.

感觉写的有些零乱,内容不是很充实.

可以在突出一下大学的重要性-----职业生涯开始前的一次综合性培训.

if you were a besinessman,it might be more easilier for you to get investment from one of your classmates who had became an investor of a large company;