stanger person and stanger place makes you feel scared===
strange persons and strange place made you.
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I gently hold you up and you are curious about looking at me====
.you were curious about me
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I'll give you a name,it's called mini====
I then gave you a name,Mini
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That day the benginning of my life has been accompanied by our.==
That day is the beginning of my life with you
实在太多了,改不过来,不过通过上面的四句话可以看出,楼主在时态问题上非常的马虎,楼主可以自己动手把全文的时态改成统一时态.另外注意以下有些句子缺少谓语动词.