The Importance Of a name
In recent years,the topic（debate） of the importance of a name has aroused pervasive attention.As we all know,some people even turn to a professional consultant for a good name.While with the flying of time,different voices have risen over whether names should be divided into good or bad?
Some people hold the opinion that a good name deserves everything.For them,a good name not only influences their emotion,but also may lead to some unexpected rewards,such as wealth,social status and promotion prospects.On the contrary,other people take the opposing view that a good name is nothing.For one thing,names have been set as a symbol of a person permanently.What's more,it can help us to communicate with each other conveniently..For another,only with a good name can not enlarge our knowledge or develop our character.
In my point of view,there shouldn't be a distinction between good names or bad names.I don't think some names will replace others completely or some names will disappear in the near future.Names are just different ways to indentify us.
我没有给你做太多修改,因为你的总体理论逻辑是不错的,但要注意个别句式,
像这种作文中,一般是分为三大段的,最好不要超过4段.还有,实际上,写这种文章,突出的还是个人的见解,所以,个人意见和前两者比起来不要显得太少,大体上句子的多少还是要对称的.
满分30分的话,给你26-28分左右吧