改错部分：
1.On the other hand,reading is another kind of traveling.It can bring me to the places where I can not go for the time being.
这里的for the time being最好改为before,楼主这样写犯了一个句式杂糅的毛病,最好不要这么写.
2.I enjoyed it on the bed and had the most beautiful dream in the world that night.
that night前面最好加个介词at
3.A few years later,I had remebered the little red ,snow white,the malicious queen and some other special roles.It seem to experience a fairy tale on my trvaling of life.
这里不可以用过去完成时,因为这里没有明显的时间提示,要用现在完成时.
4.总评：写得很好哦,语言很流利,表达的也很清楚,最大的优点在于句式很丰富,条理很清楚!加油!
关于结尾：
So,what do you think about reading and traveling?Do you enjoy joining a trip with so many good books?If you say yes,please follow me,I'll wait for you and share the happiness of reading books with everybody!
That's all,thank you!