Hello!My name is XXX.I'm from Luoyuan County Primary School,grade 6 class 7.I'm 14 years old.I'm good at drawing and like to read and do exercises.Today I have an interview with your secondary school.The great learning spirit of your school attracks me so much.Although I'm not the excellent one,I will try my best from now on.
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太多I'm的重复了,需要小小修改一下：
Good morning/afternoon,everyone!（这样比hello正式）My name is XXX.I'm 14 and study in Luoyuan County Primary School,grade 6 class 7.I'm good at painting and I am also interested in reading and exercises.Today I come to this interview with your secondary school because the culture of your school attracts me so much.Although I'm not the most excellent one,I will try my best in the future.