有几个连接词用得不对吧,拼写也有错误.
“individuals will surely not endeavor to harm the environment.By contrast,he will try every means to protect the environment.”
The behavior of individuals plays a significant role in environment protecting as well.
.还有你的句子好碎,有的完全可以复合在一起的.
不过语言准确性还算不错,逻辑也算得上清晰.应该是7分左右的文章吧.