以下是几个你要注意和加强的问题,以及一些我个人的英语写作提示
1) 每个完整的句子最少一定要有主、谓（动词）两个要素.例如原文“My school,Guangdong ocean university cunjin collage,which in Zanjiang Province.”是一个不完整句子,这句话不存在谓语（动词）,只有主语.同样的“She name Wang Zhenzhen”也是一个问题.
2) One of 后面要跟复数,所以“one of my roommate”是错的.
3) 写论文it's,we're,I'm等缩写都应该完整写出,例如It is,we are,I am.虽然缩写没错,不过书名上不够正规.
4) 每个句子和句子之间留两个空白键的空间.不要粘在一起.
我把你存在的语法问题都改了,其余都保持原样,下面是改后的版本.
1.About my family
There are three people in my family.My father,my mother,and me.My father is a worker in a factory.He is a careful man and he is always strict with me.I admire him.My mother is a housewife.She is very nice and she gets along with others.Everyone likes to make friends with her.They are good parents.I like them very much.
2.About my school
My school,the Guangdong Ocean University Cunjin Collage,is in Zanjiang Province.I think that my school is not very big but it is new.It has a large teaching building and many beautiful dormitories.But it is a pity that there are no library and swimming pool.My school is also developing.I believe it will become more and more beautiful in the future.
3.one of my roommates
I talk about one of my roommates.Her name is Wang Zhenzhen.She is a funny girl that always makes us happy.She likes singing songs.We often sing together during free time.She is so interesting that we like to play and live with her.
有什么改动不明随便问.