我就不全写下来了 改几个我认为不合适的地方
第4行末尾,raching at the peak that around 180
第5行中间,把in the following two hours放到句末
第6行,the level of number off below to 300.From the point foward我没看懂,可能应该是 from the figures above.
倒数第三行,there is 后面加a ,别老about,可以用around,nearly都行.
倒数第三行末尾,用there be,there is a slight increase between 8pm to 10pm.
最后别用finally,直接用 however,However,the graph shows that blah blah.