there are about three quanters of people love.这里不能直接用love,在love 前加个who好些.
Listen to music is改成Listening..
it is comenient and can make people comfortable.这里前面写一个句号好些,要不就用and连接.要不就用从句
I have fun listening to music没有这种表达
I have fun listening to music I started listening to music since I was a 9-year-old girl这一个句子里面有2个动词,这是不行的,你要么变成并列句,要么变成从句
When I was in sad.I always listen to some gentle music ,it makes me calm这一句改成
When I was in sad,I always listened to some gentle music which made me calm.
.I really enjoied listening to music ,so I belive in the future I will still listen to musci.这一句太别扭,建议换一种表达.修饰一下
I love music,I have fun listening to music刚才的错误.换表达
你写英文的思维要改变,这是中式英语.你可以看一部微电影,叫做 The Last...那个里面的表达是神级表达