Hello everyone. My name is ××××× ×××. Nice to meet you. I am a friendly boy. I like to make something interesting. I like computer very much. I can use the computer to draw some beautiful pictures. And I can do something else with computer. I like science, too. I love everything but I dislike sports. I always stay at home during every summer holiday. I usually stay at home to study, use computer to draw pictures, play games and do something else. Now, the new term is coming. The life of middle school is beginning, too. I should do everything better than before. I’ll do more exercise and study more hard. I think I can do that. Can you be my friend? Let’s study together!
你的基本功不错,但是也有几处语法错误 hardly不能表示努力地,hard表示努力时他的副词还是hard,还有既然是every后面的holiday就不用复数了,总体来说你写的不错,继续加油!