Earthquake which happened in September eleven was the most unforgettable to me.
Just a few years ago,one night when I was still in my slumberland ,I felt something that woke me up.My father pushed me and said,‘‘earthquake’’.We escaped to outside of the house.We stayed in car because the earthquake became stronger.Finally,it had stopped by morning.We went to check our house.Many things had broken in result of earthquake.Luckily,our house did not fall down.We started to clean our house.After we cleaned our house,we went to the city.It was terrible.Many buildings fell down.My school had been destroyed.The playground could not be used any more.I didn’t need to go to school for two weeks before the students could come back to.Many people gave many supports to our city.We appreciated that.It was a hard time for us,but many people helped us and we could rebuild our city.
其实问题不大啦,但是断句太多了,有些不该断的就最好不要断.中国式英语不是很严重而且很多句子偶读的通.注意一下用词和联句就可以啦,urban这个词不是用来表示你想表示的城市的意思,用city比较好.还有for,to,过去式等等就好了.这些要下功夫去背