did not receive改为have not received
...改为"tiredness"is the most popular word in our class
we have a sports这里改为We will have a...这里最好把句号改为逗号,然后把THAT改为WHICH MAKES ME VERY EXCITED.Hope we will have a good time.
IS BAD DAY前面要加一个a.BECAUSE这句也要加WILL.
最后一段,最好加上GOOD BYE,TAKE CARE!
WRITE TO ME SOON最好改为Hope to hear from you soon.