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i HAVE a good friend WHOSE name is liu wei.shi is our monitou AND one of the excellent students in our class.she is clever,and she works very HARD .we have a lot IN common and have a lot of( 去掉of） to talk about.one evening she told me that something happened when her parents was doing THEIR HOUSEWORK on sunday morning when she smelt something burning.she stopped 加TO look out of the window and find a cloud of smoke coming out of her neighbour's house.she called 119 immediateLY .ten miuntes later,the firemen came and put our fire.her neighbour was very thankful for her help.