1. Wednsday evening (去掉in)
2. a large crowd of
3. people gathered (去掉 had)
4. would strike / in twenty minutes' time (你打错了吧,怎么有两处错?）
5. had passed
6. minutes' hand
7. yet ( yet 此处是“然而”,therefore 是“因此”）
8. The clock has stopped (此处要用现在完成时,因前面说it is two miutes past...;而不是It was two minutes past.)注：这里空间有限讲不了太详细,此题要弄明白得复习过去完成时的概念.
9.refused (用过去时）
10.正确