1、First,working at home enable（enbales） employees to speed（spend） more time with their families.
2、In addition,for the employer's part,less(fewer) employers working in workplace means less office being rented.
3、On the other hand,(last but not least) in the highly-developed times,technology will not be the hindrance of working at home.没有on the one hand,哪来的on the other hand.
4、The widely spread and high-speed internet ensures an employee keep （keeps）contact with his colleagues and boss
5、麻烦最后不要反问好吗?
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