整段给你调整了一下,包括去掉一些错误和重复的~还有单词拼错的,希望有用
Hello!Everyone!My name is Huang Yan.You can call me Vickey in English.I am 14 years old.I was born and grown up in Hanmen.I am very tall.I have dark brown eyes and long black hair.My favorite color is yellow,because yellow is the meaning of my family name in Chinese.I like dogs,because they are very nice.I like listening to the music and I always do so in my spare time.There are five people in my family.my father,my mother,my grandfather,my sister and I.My teachers and classmates all like me at school!