求英语大神帮我修改我的说明文这是我的文章:Ms.Wu Imagine a very lovely and pretty

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  • Ms.Wu

    Imagine a very lovely and pretty teacher,teaching the students a lot of things in the classroom.Do you know who is she(正确应该是:she was 是回忆要用过去式)?She is(was) our Art teacher,Ms.Wu,a very kind and interesting teacher in my primary school,and she is(was) my role model,too.

    If you come to Nanchang Road Primary School,which is(was) my primary school,every student will tell you that Ms.Wu is the kindest teacher in this school.Foe(For) example,when you do not know how to draw something,she will teach you how to draw (that stuff 要改为 it),how to use the colors,how to draw the lines,how to make the picture more beautiful.One time,I did not know how to draw the squirrel,and I asked Ms.Wu.She told me how to draw that,and drew an example picture to(应该是:for) me.She drew the example picture very carefully.So I knew how to draw squirrel very well.My other teacher(teachers) will(要用 would) not(要加 be) so carefully(是:careful),but Ms.Wu is(was) very carefully(careful),because she want(wanted) to show us the best stuff(应该用 things).She is very kind and careful,I need to learn these things (应加上 from her).

    Besides she is very kind,her interesting classes are(were) also the reason why we love Ms.Wu so much.She usually makes the lessons very interesting.I still remember that time,we were having her Art lesson.She let us draw music!But how to draw music?Ms.Wu told us,if the rhythm of the music is vivid,you can draw some lines with colorful colors; if the rhythm of the music is very low,you can draw some stuff with dark color.Look,how interesting are(were) her classes!Her classes is(were) the most interesting classes in my primary school!She makes (made) all things interesting,(要加 and) I need to learn this,because if I am interesting,there will be more people loves(love 因为people是复数) me.

    How kind and interesting (is要用过去式放在句子後面) my Art teacher (was)!I need to learn more from my Art teacher.I love her so much!

    有多处错漏,和文章是一个回忆,所以要用过去式,已替你更正好了.

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