Nowadays,people usually busy in their work or study.缺动词 be busy
when they relaxing 又缺动词
After that,when they relaxing,some people would like spend their time alone.One the contrary,other people would like to spend with their friends or family.一看就是没话找话写,一个简单句子还写成两个了.on the contrary是大词,表达意见不同的时候再用.这个时候一个while 就自然的转过去了.
Thus,I’m quite agree the statement.口语化.
As far as I am concern语法错误.
到这里就不用看了,楼主不是我说 ,真的挺烂的.分低没心情继续改下去了.楼主先加强基本的语法和词汇把.