1. √
2. that→what
3. what→how
4. 去掉the
5. they→we
6. 去掉the
7. notice→notices
8. finding→find
9. live与or之间加入in
10. 有错,但是楼主打字有误,无法判断
11. me与go之间加入to
12. In→On
13. the→a
14. cry→crying
15. √
16. 去掉had
17. 去掉when
18. for→of
19. this→that
20. near→nearly 原创回答团(159号会员)