1、Inother words, he is so terrified of failure that he can hardly make a try and may give up opportunities easily.
用结果状语从句 that he can hardly make a try and may give up opportunities easily 太累赘,改为不定式to be hardly able to make a try and to be easyto give up the opportunity【其中opportunity是抽象名词,不宜用复数】
2、Insome extreme cases, a few pessimist can act likewhat Oscar Wilde said: "Pessimist: One who, when he has the choice of twoevils, choose both.” 本句有三处错误
a few 后面应该用复数名词 pessimistslike 是介词,不能跟从句,应该改为act as what Oscar Wilde saidOne who, when he has the choice of two evils,choose both 一句中由于插入了从句而忽略了后面的谓语动词应该用单数第三人称形式 chooses,即 One who choose both